The sun is slowly setting in this Arizona sky. The sky is always so pretty here. Especially the sunrises. I love waking up early.
The traffic is steadily dissipating as rush hour comes to an end. I’m sure people can’t wait to get home to their families after a long day at work. They’ll probably have a nice dinner together. And talk about everything that happened that day. They’ll be laughing and smiling and savoring the moments they share with one another.
I miss my family.
A little girl is playing on the sidewalk. She has pink chalk in her tiny hand. She delicately draws a flower. Or at least I think it’s a flower.
I used to love playing with chalk. I used to love playing in general. Kids are so easily amused and I’m so envious of them for being so carefree.
I remember the days when I could sit on a swing all day long and be perfectly content. We would go to the same park everyday and challenge each other to see who could fly higher. I always felt like I won, even though I never got the highest.
I see a plane gliding through the clouds. Leaving Arizona. Gradually getting higher and higher until it just vanishes. I love planes. And I love airports. I always wonder where people are going. And whose waiting for them. I always wish someone would be waiting for me.
I love the feeling you get when you’re so close to your destination. You’re anxious and excited and nervous and relaxed all at the same time.
I can’t wait to get out of here.
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Hey, I'm Blake and I'm in your new blog group. I enjoyed your blog, it was defiantly full of energy. You seem like the type of person who loves life, I could tell because in you blog you said you love many different things. Your blog was also well written, I couldn't find any thing wrong with it, except i think you used and to begin a sentence. The rest of the blog was good though and I enjoyed reading it. Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteHello! Nice to meet you. I liked this blog of yours very much. You pull in a lot of specific details and mostly focus on your own emotions in relation to those details. It was quite revelatory about your personality and your relationship to people in the world in general. Although you have some sad moments (missing your family, etc.) the tone is primarily optimistic, and it’s nice that you can imagine such nice destinations and thoughts for the lives outside your window.
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You write: “The sun is slowly setting in this Arizona sky. The sky is always so pretty here. Especially the sunrises. I love waking up early.”
This beginning is mildly disorienting, only because you jump from sunset to sunrise very quickly and end the line with “waking up early”. Although your essay is set at sunset, this beginning suggests that it could be morning (hence your reflection on waking early) and is a little confusing.
“Whose” should be “who is”. “Whose” indicates belonging i.e. “Whose purse is this?”
You also overuse the word “so” a little. It’s an easy thing to do, but also an easy thing to watch out for, and it will give you the opportunity to use different, interesting verbs instead of relying on the “so” to enhance the action. Example: “Kids are so easily amused and I’m so envious of them for being so carefree.”